"Don’t want it to get too long!" Why not? It's a fine story so far. This world seems to have a lot of secrets waiting to be revealed. Not to mention the boy meets girl and chases her until she catches him story line. And the scientific expedition story line (which had other interesting characters). And the nod to "The Time Machine" (Morlocks and Eloi with the serial numbers filed off) is being handled well.
"Don’t want it to get too long!" Why not? It's a fine story so far. This world seems to have a lot of secrets waiting to be revealed. Not to mention the boy meets girl and chases her until she catches him story line. And the scientific expedition story line (which had other interesting characters). And the nod to "The Time Machine" (Morlocks and Eloi with the serial numbers filed off) is being handled well.
I have no time! You are right, this will go much longer. I’m enjoying writing it and will keep at it.